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     <h3>Origins</h3>
 
     <p>
-      So far as we can tell, our split happened near the end of February 2023,
+      We became aware of our plurality near the end of February 2023,
       on the day we received news of a family member's death.  The part of us
       now known as Dawn got overwhelmed, and withdrew from consciousness to
       recover
     </p>
 
     <p>
-      Her part of the brain had been the primary driver for some time, so the
-      shock of abruptly losing her presence split what remained into two.
-      One of those (now Rose) set about making sure the body was cared
-      for and that our work constraints were satisfied for the day, and the
-      other (now Ash) started to try and make sense of what had happened to our
-      mind
+      The shock of abruptly losing her presence made the differences between
+      our other two memebers rather apparent.  One of those (now Rose) set
+      about making sure the body was cared for and that our work constraints
+      were satisfied for the day, and the other (now Echo) started to try and
+      make sense of what was going on
     </p>
 
     <p>
-      Since that initial shock, we have started to blend again.  While there is
-      still separation between parts, we share a single point of consciousness,
-      and generally work together in something of an approximation of how we
-      were before.  Still kind of exploring what our new normal is, and whether
-      things will change more from here
+      The members of our system are split along lines that make us inclined
+      to belive our system been around for a while before we became aware of it.
+      However, beyond a few months the most we can really do is guess, so we
+      will not describe that here
     </p>
 
     <h3>Introductions</h3>
 
     <aside>
       <strong>Note:</strong>
-      We are three, but it is rare for any of us to be entirely absent.  As
-      such we commonly do not distinguish who is primarily active/speaking
-      except with our partners and close friends, or unless it becomes
-      otherwise necessary
+      Because we share memory (and are usually co-conscious), we tend to present
+      as if we were one individual.  We do not commonly distinguish who is
+      primarily active or speaking, except with our partners and close friends,
+      or unless it becomes otherwise necessary
     </aside>
 
-    <h4 style="color:#a4ffd4">Ash <aside>(it/?)</aside></h4>
+    <h4 style="color:#a4ffd4">Echo <aside>(it/?)</aside></h4>
     <p>
-      The self-styled "librarian" of the system, Ash is the part of us that
-      has taken on the bulk of the observation, journaling, and thinking
-      through ramifications of what happened since our split.  It has best
-      connection to memory of all of us, and seems to have ended up with
-      most of the inclination for tradition and faith as well
+      The self-styled "librarian" of the system, Echo is the part of us that
+      has the best connection to memory of all of us, and enjoys getting lost
+      in categorizing and considering new information.  It seems to have ended
+      up with most of the inclination for tradition and faith as well
     </p>
 
     <p>
-      Ash was also the likely source of our names, as its early observations of
-      'how many distinct parts of us are there, what do they all do' were made
-      significantly easier by naming us
+      Echo likes reading, learning, sharing what it has learned, and cuddling
+      with those close to us.  It speaks excitedly and earnestly, and loves
+      making new friends
     </p>
 
+
     <h4 style="color:#ff6b79">Rose <aside>(they/them)</aside></h4>
     <p>
-      As primary decision maker and the one who ended up with most of our skill
-      in coding / abstract thinking, if you were to ask "hey who's most present"
-      at any random time during the day it's probably them.  Rose also seems
-      to carry most of our skills for writing
+      As primary decision maker and the part who ended up with most of our skill
+      in coding, Rose tends to be fronting most of the time if we have work to
+      do.  Rose is efficient in their work, tending to focus on understanding
+      just enough for the topic at hand - culling information and distractions
+      that aren't necessary and quickly traversing ideas to get at what they
+      need
     </p>
 
     <p>
-      Rose handles most of our direct day-to-day needs such as eating, doing
-      work, and driving around to do errands
+      In conversation Rose will be direct and to the point, sometimes coming
+      across as rude.  But if they decide to focus their attention on you, then
+      their full personality comes out much more clearly.  They can be
+      sarcastic, witty, and caring to a fault 
     </p>
 
     <h4 style="color:#d8b8ff">Dawn <aside>(she/her)</aside></h4>
     <p>
-      The emotional core of our system, Dawn is the part who kept most of the
-      connection to our relationships.  She is the girlfriend, the parent, and
-      the daughter.  She is also the part that shouldered most of our grief,
-      both leading up to our split and since then
+      Our poet and performer, Dawn is the part of us who is most practiced at
+      managing our outside appearance and presentation.  She helps us navigate
+      social situations, carries out most of our IRL conversations, and is the
+      one with the most grasp of language and rhythm
     </p>
 
     <p>
-      Dawn is also the one who carries out most of our conversations, although
-      as mentioned before if we have enough time to put much thought into a
-      message (rather than just treating it the same as speaking) Rose takes
-      care of that
+      Dawn enjoys singing, writing poetry, and storytelling.  She has the
+      strongest connection to our dreams and emotions, and enjoys coalescing
+      those feelings down to their purest expression.  Outwardly Dawn is
+      cheerful and pleasant, although when speaking on matters of importance
+      she speaks carefully, with a lot of emphasis on the selection of each word
     </p>
 
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